[AtlanticBlue99]

Originally Posted by jdansby1 Here's a paper I wrote a while back. It was a one page paper and the topic was life in the eyes of a american revolutionary war soldier. Freedom is not given, but rather taken in hopes that future generations will live by and cherish all libertys in our great nation. A war has been waged with a country we once called home, yet in recent years, that home has become a vague memory, and a new home has been born, a home we can call our own. I have fought for my freedom. I have watched fellow countrymen die at the end of a double-edged sword. I have shouted victory cries in rememberance of what was lost, but more importantly, all that was gained. One hundred years from now, who will remember me? Will anyone see the pain I have endoured to bring the freedom of speech, the freedom of religion, the freedoms that twenty years ago, no one would have dreamed possible; probobly not. But the war that we wage is not to glorify one man. There are no pedastals to be placed upon. No, we fight for the future. As I think of home, I think of my family. My wife, without a husband; my son, without a father; my parents, without a child. But still I drive onward into battle, for without this battle, without this nation, I would have no family. I would have no home. I would have nothing. I dream and pray that my son will grow up to be twice the man I am, and that he would have the freedom to do so. A question I am often asked by my fellow soldiers is that of a simple nature, yet has an answer as vast as the universe we live in. “What do you fear?” Fear; a word I wish had no control over my life, yet that very word is one I can not let go. I do not fear a battle. I do not fear a gun. No, I fear something I have no control over. What will tomorrow bring? As I look back at the history of man, I question everything we “know.” 1,500 years ago, we “knew” the sun revolved around Earth. 500 years ago, we “knew” the planet was flat. So again you ask me what do I fear? It is not that of which we know. No, I fear something much greater. I fear the unknown. Freedom fears no man. A saying I live my life by. For when you fear freedom, you fear everything we are. And we you fear everything you are, you are nothing. It just gives you an idea of sentence structure and really choosing a topic and sticking with it. It was written in first person, since that was the topic of the essay, haha.

You misspelled "liberties" in the first sentence, and you used second person in closing...

[Dansby]

Originally Posted by AtlanticBlue99 You misspelled "liberties" in the first sentence, and you used second person in closing...

Microsoft word didn't pick that up, so neither did I, haha.

And I was writing from first person, therefor I was saying it. So in the paper, the "you"s were mearly advice being given by myself.

[Till]

Ok thanks guys, explain maybe a little more how can I grab them Like i said im not good at writing and i dont understand how to transition well