[AtlanticBlue99]

i wrote a paper today after school that is due tomorrow and wanted to see if any of you wanted to do a little proofreading. it is a 3 page paper minues the works cited, 4 with. so any grammar issues, content, etc. let me know please

Chris Alexander
Mr. Barney
AP U.S. History
18 October 2005
The United States of America: 35 Years After Independence
By May of 1789, the thirteen original colonies of America collaborated to ratify a single constitution that would govern the newly sovereign states. This constitution, aptly named The Constitution of The United States of America, was comprised of a heartfelt Preamble, written by Thomas Jefferson, and a Bill of Rights, the first ten amendments. With all thirteen states finally on the same page as far as establishing the formal government, it was now time to begin to build the country into the superpower she is today. Throughout the first 35 years of government after the Constitution, the U.S.’s first five presidents faced challenges headlong with determination and perseverance. Three of these challenges include maintaining peaceful international relations with England and France, keeping order with internal politics within America, and creating a stable economy for the country to support itself with.
A major issue president George Washington faced when he first took office in 1789 was a topic our Constitution stresses very heavily: national security. England was respectfully dishonored by her loss in the American War for Independence, and relations between America and England slowly faded and went sour by the time James Madison became the fourth president in 1809. During Madison’s time as president, relations with England turned into war, known as the War of 1812. England would impress American merchants into her naval power and support Tripolitan Pirates, who would attack U.S. ships in the Mediterranean Sea, threatening our national security. After England refused to remove soldiers from the Great Lakes area in a timely manner, America declared war on England in an overwhelming vote by Congress.
Another trying issue faced by our founding fathers was that of the French Revolution. The French Revolution, a ten-year war from 1789-1799, ousted the French monarchy and placed the emperor Napoleon Bonaparte on top of the French government. With Napoleon taking over Europe, England began to feel a little uneasy and wanted the newly established American government to cease trade with France. Again, England tries to suppress the international power America is already undertaking. With secret trading going on behind the scenes, America is able to build her internal morale while maintaining a stable economy as well.
The politics within America were very fair and equal, boosting the morale of otherwise questionable residents of the lands. Belonging to a party such as the Federalists, or the Democratic-Republicans could boost one’s appearance in society. A challenge that Washington almost immediately faced upon entering office was what is known as the Whisky Rebellion. Washington and his secretary, Alexander Hamilton, trotted off to encounter the Scots-Irish settlers in western Pennsylvania who were in protest of the “sin tax” established by Hamilton to boost our newly independent economy. After explaining that the buyer paid the tax, not the brewer, the rebellion ceased. With this situation now under control, Washington and his cabinet could move on to developing our judiciary system, which was fairly weak at the time. With the Judiciary Act of 1789, Washington led his party into defining our Supreme Court, the highest court in the nation comprised of five associates below a chief justice and an Attorney General. In 1801, another Judiciary Act was passed by John Adams to create more judges. Adams then appointed his man, Marbury, to the court the midnight his term was over. This issue turned into a huge debate and a major challenge within our nation’s early government. Madison, the next president, ignored the request for Marbury’s nomination, leaving questions of power under scrutiny.
Another area of newly independent America under scrutiny was the new economy. To help boost the new economy, Alexander Hamilton proposed a Five-Point Bank Plan to 1) repay all debts, 2) assume the states’ debts, 3) charter a national bank to establish a uniformed currency and exchange rate, 4) install a tariff to promote manufacturing and trade, and 5) install an excise tax on whisky. Alongside Hamilton’s bank plan, a man by the name of Henry Clay devised the American System, a system promoting a continental market within America to unify the West and South with mostly commercial New England.
Through the Federalist world outlook of trans-Atlantic trade as opposed to the Democratic Republican outlook of westward expansion, our nation developed a zeitgeist of high morale in what our leaders were doing to handle the various challenges erupting within and around our borders. By promoting business, land ownership, and settlement of our newly acquired lands, our leaders could efficiently handle disputes with England and France, keep order with internal politics, and create a stable economy. As Washington stated in his farewell address, America would endure the challenges of time with the powers of democracy if: “the U.S. may be very careful in making permanent entangling alliances.”

Works Cited
KUSD (2002). The Judiciary Act of 1801. Retrieved October 17, 2005 from http://www .kusd.edu/schools/lance/platinum/banaszynski/civil_war_2002/time_line_links_2002/1801_judiciary_act.html
The U.S. Constitution FAQ (2005). Who wrote the Preamble?. Retrieved October 17, 2005 from http://www.usconstitution.net/constfaq.html
Wikipedia (2005). Alexander Hamilton. Retrieved October 17, 2005 from http://en.wikip edia.org/wiki/Alexander_Hamilton
Wikipedia (2005). The French Revolution. Retrieved October 17, 2005 from http://en. wikipedia.org/wiki/F rench_Revolution
Yale Law School (1996). Washington’s Farewell Address. Retrieved October 17, 2005 from http://www.yale.edu/lawweb/avalon/washing.htm

[sAJ1420]

This constitution, aptly named The Constitution of The United States of America, was comprised of a heartfelt Preamble, written by Thomas Jefferson, and a Bill of Rights, the first ten amendments.


seems kind of like a long sentance, and the way you have it written seems like "the first ten amendments" is part of your list, but i think what your trying to say is

....written by Thomas Jefferson, and a Bill of Rights; which is the first 10 amendments.

or maybe better,

....written by Thomas Jefferson, and a Bill of Rights (the first 10 amendments.)

not an english major but just my opinion

[sAJ1420]

another thing, since you said a heartfelt Preamble i dont think it should be capitalized... that would be if you said the Preamble (meaning from our constitution)

again im not positive but might want to check

[DarthStriker]

got my mom to proofread it(she is an english teacher) and all she said is that some parts dont flow....whatever the hell that means

[sAJ1420]

another thing is in your second paragraph you go from past tense to present. (began, begin, was, is, etc.)

[AtlanticBlue99]

ok thanks, ill go revise. it is just hard for me to proofread my paper right after writing it lol. thanks guys