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AP Lit Essay
An Essay on Billy Budd for those who want to proofread my new paper lol. c'mon eric, let your mom read this one too- she is a lit teacher and this is on Billy Budd, she will like it. max of 1200 words, mine is 1196 minus my name and title
Chris Alexander AP American Language Ms. Hamilton 19 October 2005 The Pleasure and Disquietude in Billy Budd Herman Melville’s novel, Billy Budd, harbors a healthy confusion of pleasure and disquietude. Melville’s superior work, which was found in his manuscripts after his death, provides a deep insight into human sociological interactions and the coaxes of evil upon purity. In Billy Budd, Melville places Billy as the protagonist, and he leads Billy through a series of tempting psychological and sociological situations to try and break his angelic moral state. Melville tells the reader about Billy’s journey, a journey that causes the reader to think and to feel pleasure and disquietude. Melville uses the complex literary techniques of Biblical allusions, diction, and imagery to portray his overall message in the story and make the reader feel the differences of pleasure and disquietude. Herman Melville utilizes the complex and popular technique of Biblical allusions in his short narrative, Billy Budd. Billy Budd acts as a “handsome sailor” to his crew of peers throughout his life. Billy is handsome, able, and good spirited; he is a naturally good man in a world where fear and jealousy rule, and “When fear and jealousy rule, being good can make you hated. Doing good can get you killed.” Billy is so perfect in his physical appearance and mental state, Melville compare him to Adam in the Bible. Adam, like Billy, is a handsome and pure man; he is perfect. When Melville compares Billy to Adam, the reader initially feels comforted and warmhearted towards Billy. Knowing that Billy is a perfect model of human life is quite pleasurable. However, one thing about Melville’s comparison of Billy to Adam leaves a feeling of uneasiness and a hint of insecurity in the reader’s mind; Adam, later in life, reaches a blunder and loses his pureness. He is tainted by the evil in the world when he disobeys God. This complex allusion of Billy’s moral character foreshadows that Billy will too reach a blunder; he will later fault, be overcome by evil, and change the lives of his peers for what he will do. Another Biblical allusion that Melville uses in Billy Budd is that of Abraham and Isaac. Melville compares the relationship of the honorable Captain Edward Fairfax Vere and Billy to that of Abraham and Isaac in the Bible. The story of Abraham and Isaac is one of blind trust and fate; Abraham must sacrifice his son because God tells him to. Since Abraham thinks with his heart and puts his blind trust in the words of God, his son is saved. The relationship of Vere and Billy is similar to this, but also different. Vere has the authority over Billy’s life as Abraham did Isaac’s, but Vere thinks with his books, not his heart, so Billy suffers a different fate. Because Vere does not think with his heart or follow the words of God, his sentencing of Billy to death was not reverted by God, and Billy will hang at sunrise the following morning. With an understanding of the Biblical story of Abraham and Isaac, the reader is pleasured by the fact that the captain of the ship has a close, father-son relationship with the perfect Billy Budd. However, again Melville utilizes an allusion in which the reader must think about the situation. After contemplation of the relationship discussed, the reader knows that Vere is does not think like Abraham; he does not use his heart. Since Vere does not follow his heart in his decision, the reader knows that Billy must die. The fact that Billy’s death is imminent leaves the uneasy feeling of disquietude in the reader once again. Melville also uses the complex literary technique of diction to give the reader a feeling of pleasure and disquietude. In picking the names of the ships at sea, Melville can create a sense of pleasure or uneasiness. It is pleasurable to know that Billy is on board a merchant ship aptly named the Rights-of-Man. When the British Navy impresses Billy onto the Bellipotent, his rights are taken away. The Bellipotent is aptly named as well, as belli is the plural form of war in Latin, and potent means of a great amount in Latin. Also, when Billy was impressed, he is “enslaved” by the British. Slavery is a sin, so impressment is immoral as well. When Billy is taken aboard the Bellipotent, he loses his social surrounding of peace and stability. The warship is a society where fear and jealousy rule. Knowing that the innocent Billy has his rights taken away leaves a disgusting feeling of disquietude in the reader, as do the names of the French warships of the era. The French has naval ships named after the legions of Hell and destruction, including the names of Hell, Devastation, and Athee. Melville is also able to make the reader feel pleasure and disquietude through various forms of imagery, including light, dark, animal, and demonic. Billy is referred to through light imagery throughout most of the story. Billy is often named the ”handsome sailor” and presented in an angelic way. After Billy strikes Claggart dead in an accidental blow to the forehead, Vere says, “Struck dead by an angel of God! Yet the angel must hang.” It is pleasurable to the reader to know Billy is angelic, but the fact that Billy must die is unsettling. Claggart, Billy’s envious opposition, is portrayed by Melville in dark, animal, and demonic imagery. Throughout the story, the reader is reminded that Claggart is, as Pluto stated, “naturally depraved” and Claggart becomes more intensely evil as the story progresses. Claggart having a pale complexion and dark hair is odd since he works aboard a naval ship. Claggart is referred to as a snake numerous times throughout the novel, and serpent imagery is symbolic to evil. As the reader gets hints that Claggart is envious and evil, the reader feels a sense of disquietude and discomfort. At the scene of Claggart’s death Claggart is described as “the accuser’s eyes, removing not as yet from the blue dilated ones, underwent a phenomenal change, their wonted rich violet color blurring into a muddy purple. Those lights of human intelligence, losing human expression, were gelidly protruding like the alien eyes of certain uncatalogued creatures of the deep.” Claggart’s naturally evil nature suppressed Billy’s ability to talk and forced Billy to kill Claggart, tainting the pureness of the handsome sailor. At this instant, the reader feels the deepest pain in disquietude with knowledge that the legend of the handsome sailor is now ended, as the purest of them all has been tainted. Herman Melville uses complex literary devices in Billy Budd to tell his message to the reader. Through telling the story of the pure Billy Budd, Melville is able to make the reader think deeply, feel pleasure, feel discomfort, and even feel pain. Melville uses the complex literary techniques of Biblical allusions, diction, and imagery to portray his overall message in the story: the message of the vulnerability of innocence. Although Billy is pure and innocent, he is not perfect. Billy’s innocence leads him into troublesome traps in naval society, one of which will end his life and leave the reader feeling a healthy confusion of pleasure and disquietude.
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it is due thurs. and if i have 3 or more errors i fail. so this is a big paper.
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why are the dates always the next day on ur papers haha
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b/c it is due the next day. i need to change this one to thurs date though
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There are two spaces after a period and last time I checked, most literary experts considered Moby Dick his superior work. I'm not sure if the title of a book should be underlined or in quotes. I'll try looking at it this evening and bust out an MLA hand book.
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Uh, you've got alot of work to do because this essay seems like a bunch of sentences slapped together (with the words pleasure and disquietude) instead of a coherent essay. Please post your original outline and what sentence you plan to call your thesis and I'll see if I can help.
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I find this line is the best summary of your essay:
"Melville uses the complex literary techniques of Biblical allusions, diction, and imagery to portray his overall message in the story: the message of the vulnerability of innocence. " Change the message to "with innocence comes vulnerability" And you've got a decent thesis. Stick it at the end of your introduction. Try to make the body support this idea of "vulnerability of innocence" in each paragraph. Have this kind of order: Paragraph 1: Introduction (include the info about melville, then the book, then work down to the thesis). Paragraph 2: Backround, here you explain about the time period of the book, introduce the characters and anything else the reader needs to know. Paragraph 3: keep it short, talk about the fact that there are two biblical allusions, possibly name the books of the bible these are found. Paragraph 4: Go indepth on the Adam Allussion. Paragraph 5: Go indepth on the Abraham Allusion (explain how the story takes a different twist) Paragraph 6: Talk about dictation, Paragraph 7: Talk about Imagry Paragraph 8: summerize how the Allussions, dictation, and imagry all point to "vulnerability of innocence" and wrap it up with the comment on how this innocence does not equal perfection. You may want to drop out 3, it's your preference. Some tips: Do not start or end sentences the same way unless you actually have a rhetorical motive to do so. It looks like you're uncreative. This goes to ending with disquietude which is a somewhat uncommon word which should only sparingly if at all and also starting sentences with Mellville or Herman Melville". Next, it wouldn't hurt to quote the book or perhaps name a chapter as kind of supporting evidence of your essay. Finally, remember than an essay is a written arguement and your thesis is the point. If what you are saying isn't driving at that point, don't say it. If you sound like a hap-hazzard "laundry list" of reasons, you aren't going to win over the reader either. You've got to use your facts carefully to convey clarity. Furthermore, calling this work "superior", talking about the "pleasure" a reader gets from the novel (unless you make it clear that this is subjective), talking about the "psycology" using phycological terminology, or talking about the "sociology" by comparing aspects of the book to some well studied society could all be 10 page essays in and of themselves. You can be suggestive about these things but your Essay doesn't support such strong statements (there are 0 references to the story as to why this is true). Keeping your essay an analysis of the literary devices which support the idea of "innocence = vulnerable imperfection" is your best bet to get an A (and thus college credit for the AP class). Try to keep it from being an opinion essay or a comparative essay.
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Holy Shit Fallstar!!! Are you a college prof. by chance!
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I read an article the other day saying that it is just one space after sentences now.... wish I could remember what it was on..msn or yahoo news I think. I'll try to find it.
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my paper was better when it was 7 pages. we have to use pleasure and disquietude a lot because our teacher said too emphasize that strongly. my paper was 1800 words with more emphasis on biblical allusions and i had a section for irony and contrast. she said either 2 or 1 period after sentences, just dont do both in the same paper. thanks for your help fallstar. it is due tomorow, so ill go make some revisions right now
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